I presented my paper to my peer reviewer, saying that I was aware that it needed some work. I was a little confused about whether or not we could include our opinions in this essay, because it was supposed to be objective. I told her that I went to an AcoUstiKats practice, and I had really just outlined the scene so far. I also told her that I felt like I might struggle with the length requirement. Then I handed her my computer.
As I read my neighbors essay, I kept in mind that she was also struggling with the length requirement. In a different color, I typed out where she should include more details: When she introduced some of her characters, the speakers at CSF, I suggested that she describe them more. She described their effects on the student audience, but I wanted her to elaborate on why she felt that gave off those effects. I told her to include what they looked like, what their personalities were like, how old they were, ext.
Since her essay was on CSF, I thought maybe one way to lengthen her essay would be to compare this Christian group with one she may be familiar with or heard about before, like in high school. This might give someone an idea about how different CSF is from traditional bible studies, and this could also reinforce her scene depiction.
Unlike most times I have had to do peer review, I actually though this was very helpful. My paper wasn't just read and not only grammar mistakes were pointed out. After class, I knew I had to add opinions and my experiences to the paper, which I wasnt sure if I should do or not before. I was told to add an experience from the beginning of the year and compare with with my observation from last week, which will strengthen my paper, and increase the length.
I think next time, encourage people to only look at one other paper, and devote the whole time to that paper. This makes your feedback much more well-though out, and it could really help someone out.
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